The Eight Sentences
Then back into the phone, Hixon asked, “So how’s Sweet Melinda?”
Dillon shouted, “The peasants call her the goddess of gloom.”
“Give her my love and tell her that the last time we were together, she left me howling at the moon.”
Thibaut could hear a deep raspy cough come from the phone. It sounded like the last gasp of a dying soul with chronic lung disease.
Hixon was about to end the conversation; he could see Betty Lou coming toward them with her arms loaded with plates and saucers balancing their breakfast better than the guy on Ed Sullivan spinning plates, “So you think you can fix us up?”
“Yes, I think it can be easily done. Out on Highway sixty-one,” and Dillon disconnected.
The Set Up
Another scene from The Tourist Killer.
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This is the end of a telephone conversation between John Hixon and his old hippie friend, Robert Dillon. After spending a week in the desert with Carlos Casteneda back in the sixties, Dillion began speaking using only lyrics from Bob Dylan songs.
Hixon humored him and often joined the banter with Dylan lyrics, also.
Lyrics featured in this snippett come from "Just Like Tom Thumb's Blues" and "Highway Sixty-one."
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Oh, just love it, Chip! I know I missed some installments from the Presidents Club, so will be sure to ask Danny for a copy for Christmas.
ReplyDeleteBlessings!
Disconnected? Wow, that sets up for what should be an interesting read. I love how you end this snippet this way - makes me want to know more.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment, Frank.
DeleteYou found another of my double entendres!
Your characterizations are amazing as always.
ReplyDeleteGood thing Dylan had a fairly wide repertoire. I hesitate to imagine what a conversation with Arlo Guthrie lyrics might be like . . .
Interesting interaction between your characters.
ReplyDeleteThe Tourist Killer? Now that's an interesting juxtaposition. I'm intrigued by the rhyme in the last line. Intentional?
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Direct quote from Dylan's lyrics. So, yes, it was intentional.
DeleteDirect quote from Dylan's lyrics. So, yes, it was intentional.
DeleteInteresting snippet, always enjoy dialog the way you write it!
ReplyDelete"...the last gasp of a dying soul with chronic lung diseases." I can hear it. A short snippet, but ends on "a wanna know more" note.
ReplyDeleteInteresting. I like the dynamic between the two and you definitely left me hanging.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Rayne. The line about the last gasp of a dying soul is wonderful. Enjoyed the snippet.
ReplyDeleteNice job at capturing my curiosity...and love that he's talking in lyrics! Very creative!
ReplyDeleteI think the concept of his old hippie friend talking in Dylan lyrics is somewhere between fascinating, so creative, and just plain fun! Nice job, Chip! :-)
ReplyDeleteLove the uniqueness of all your characters. Quite the intriguing snippet with all that is going on in the place. Loved it!
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