The Eight Sentences:
The Manhattan skyline glowed like bullion thanks to the sun’s rays just before dusk. Claudia Barry appreciated the spectacle from her table in the Vu Lounge of the Hyatt Regency in Jersey City. She held her martini glass up so she could observe the Freedom Tower through her drink. She liked the distorted view. It gave her ideas for a watercolor painting she planned to complete while in the northeast.
She turned to a fresh sheet of paper in her leather portfolio and wrote with her antique fountain pen.
She moved the pen with a deliberate pace. The painter’s hand moved the premium writing instrument with an assassin’s precision.
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| Claudia's view of the Freedom Tower from Jersey City. Image credit: Etier Photography/Royal Flamingo Works, LLC |
The Back Story:
Readers first met Claudia Barry in The Tourist Killer. As that book ended, she had decided to take a year off from work. The sequel, A Year Without Killing, tells what she did during that twelve month sabbatical. She did not leave her weapons at home.
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I know a lot about Claudia from this snippet. Intriguing eight.
ReplyDeleteI love this line: "The painter’s hand moved the premium writing instrument with an assassin’s precision." (And the antique fountain pen is a nice touch.)
ReplyDeleteInteresting snippet and so revealing. I have to agree with PT. I loved that line, too.
ReplyDeleteExcellent job with the description in this snippet.
ReplyDeleteLove the final sentence in the excerpt! This is such an intriguing story, can't wait for more....great 8!
ReplyDeleteIt is obvious and wonderful that you are able to describe the scenery through your photographer eyes - it really helps to pain the scene for your readers. And I also adore your last line "...assassin’s precision", wow! Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteI like the distorted view through the glass--as an idea for a watercolor painting. I'd never before thought of it that way, but dang--you're spot on! :-)
ReplyDeleteAnd that last line? Perfect. :-)
Like the contrast of that last sentence. The scene is serene, painterly, and then the phrase "assassin's precision" leaps out at you. Everything is not as it seems...
ReplyDeleteA well-rounded personality! Very nice descriptions and details.
ReplyDeleteLooking through the glass is a neat touch. Nicely done, sir.
ReplyDeleteExcellent character description there Chip! And I do need something new to read...
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Last line is great...
ReplyDeleteLove your description of the skyline! I find that being a photographer helps with descriptions :-)
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