Saturday, April 27, 2013

A hot Star gets hotter with every step



The Eight Sentences:

       He began to loosen his tie and saw Star enter from a cloud of steam pouring out of the bath. She wore nothing but beads of hot water that glistened as they rolled down her face, arms, and chest.                                                             When she stepped into the room, the cooler air gave her goose bumps. Her hair was soaked and pulled back into a wet ponytail that fell well past her shoulders and supplied a constant stream of water down her back. The water streaming off her nude body created a soggy trail across the carpet. 
       Another step and they were near enough for him to reach her, she stopped and surrendered by allowing her arms to fall at her sides. With one hand, he took the wet ponytail and pulled her head back. She looked up and saw him lean in so she shut her eyes and gently parted her lips for the kiss.

The Back Story:
        Last week's snippet from The Tourist Killer was so popular, it seemed like a logical progression to continue with a few more samples from my first novelIn this scene, London businessman, Brian Farrell enters the apartment of his personal assistant/lover, Star Braun. The image at the left is one from Google Images and fits my mental image of Star.


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19 comments:

  1. Wow! Wonderful description, Chip! :-) Good eight :-)

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    1. Thanks, Teresa.
      One of my favorite scenes in the book.

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  2. Terrific image of her and really vivid description!

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  3. Wow, great descriptions in this snippet. Well done, Chip!

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  4. grrr... getting juicier and juicier. I'm in, what's next?

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  5. Oh man, that is so sexy. Nothing hotter than a man fisting his hand in your hair and pulling your head back to receive his kiss. I had a gentleman friend who...yikes, TMI. Very intriguing 8.

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  6. Excellent descriptions (whew---fans self)!

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  7. Very sensual scene! I'm interested to see where these two go. Thanks, Chip!

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  8. Today must be the day for hotness. Same sorta thing over at my blog today, Chip. LOL Love this visual you've created here. Super job!

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  9. Fabulous descriptions. It was so easy for me to see this scene in my head. Well done.

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  10. Sensuous, wonderful descriptions...terrific snippet!

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  11. Good eight, Frank. You switched POV in the last sentence from him to her, so you might want to change "saw him lean in" to "and he leaned in" to keep it tight. Nicely done. Hot stuff. :)

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  12. Chip, who knew you had it in you to write sexy, too??? Well done!

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  13. Nice! Love the soggy trail. No one ever thinks of that when they write getting out of the shower wet. The snippet's very seductive. Well done!

    Re: that POV switch (great catch!). If you break it with a paragraph break, you could use it as a smooth POV transition, no need for the scene break symbol.

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  14. Love the way she emerges from the cloud of steam. So easy to picture from there! Nice sexy snippet!

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  15. Very sexy, especially with the photo you provided. :)

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