Saturday, August 30, 2014

A jackhammer on steroids

Hawk's Hog
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The Eight Sentences:

The sound of a jackhammer on steroids from the front parking lot interrupted their attempt at a conversation. Next, they heard the popping sound of a small caliber pistol.

“Was that an Uzi?” asked Dryden.

“Fuckin’ A, followed by return fire from a toy gun,” said Scully.
They both drew their weapons and began to move to vantage points to observe the action out front. Dryden, in a stage whisper, said, “You mean a Glock, right?”
“Yep, Mattel -- Barbie and Ken.”
Outside, they could see a 379 pound man on his side behind a Harley-Davidson Electra Glide as he slammed a loaded magazine into his Glock 9 mm semi-automatic pistol.

The Setup:
    A previous snippet introduced the League of Old Men and now here they are in action. For this assignment they met at the Mountain Empire Airport (what a cool name! Watch for a blog on this.) in Virginia. The big guy on the Hog is Hawk Barger, relative of  Sonny Barger, one of the Hell's Angels at the infamous Altamont Free Concert. I'll blog about that one soon, too.

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  1. Just love that you added the sound!!

  2. Second post. First didn't stick (I think). I appreciated the sound effects. Thanks!

  3. Sounds like things are heating up outside. Great snippet, Frank. :)

  4. Love the "jackhammer on steroids."

    So, who has the Uzi? I hope you pick up from here next week -- I want to know what's going on!

    (Psst. An extra question mark snuck in after Dryden's name in the second paragraph. I have that problem with quotation marks.)

  5. oooh, tense! Uzi's are scary ... Did you mean "an Uzi" instead of "in Uzi"?

    1. Yes. Thanks for pointing that out.
      Fixed now.

  6. Nice! Appreciated the sound effects. The Altamont incident is probably Mick's fault, if he's the one who did the hiring, that is. What was he thinking? I love that these guys are out there instead of sitting around waiting to die. I have the phrase drummer on steroids in one of my books, but I can't remember which one. Cool image, though.

  7. Loved the sound action packed snippet today for sure!

  8. I think this comment might finally stick---I've been having a terrible time all afternoon!

    Scully is the awesome. You have a knack for creating distinct voices.

    And your sound effects attracted the attention of both my kids and the cat. :D

  9. Oh my, I don't think this is going to end well. Love your use of sound description, you actually made me HEAR it all as I read. Well done.

  10. Man, this is full of big, loud images. The word, 'jackhammer', really resonates here. Nice.

  11. I like how you are so technical with guns, really I have no idea what's the difference between them.